domingo, 19 de septiembre de 2010

My Evolution in Electronic Literacy

I started using electronic tools as a way of having fun, but as time passed by they turned into my way of learning. Now they are part of my life, because they are very necessary in my education and in my personal life. I began using them since I was younger I continue applying them, and for all the advantages I am going to use them. Going beyond fun I use electronic instruments, because they allow me increase my knowledge in any field.
When I was 9 years old I was obsessed with Mary-Kate and Ashley (actresses from Disney Chanel) and I wanted to get pictures from the, but I could not find them from magazines. So, I decided to get into the internet in order to have some pictures from them. Then I began using the computer just for playing games from the internet. In addition, I had to use them in secondary school, because my teachers asked me to do homework. Another way of manipulating these tools was the necessity to work with them because in High School I studied a technical career called “computation”.
Electronic tools have been very useful and needful in my education and my personal life nowadays. Since I got to the university I had to employ them to work in some subjects online and in the exchange program which have gave me the opportunity to learn in different ways and increase my educative knowledge. Furthermore, running word processors (PowerPoint, Word and Excel) have helped me in my assignments and presentations. They are very serviceable and easy to work on besides they are very professional. Not only electronic tools have been useful in my education, but also in my personal life. I can meet new people and talk with them even if they are far away. Facebook, e-mails, and other social networks are good altenatives to establish new friendships for me.
I like to think that all these electronic instruments will be very beneficial in my future life. One day I will be teacher and I would like to give my students classes online. So my students will interact with the information provided and look for more. Moreover, I will have the chance of creating innovating teaching materials. These materials will help students to have an easy and significant learning. Finally, I know that electronic tools will provide me the resources to continue studying. I would like to study a master degree abroad through internet. Besides, I would love to study courses related with my B.A. as Education and learning Psychology.
Everything started playing on internet, but then it turned into part of my professional training. Knowing how to manage the internet, the computer and word processors let me increase my knowledge, making new friends and being in touch with new technologies. From my childhood to my present and until my future electronic technologies have been and will be a great ways to be educated and learn even more. For all their benefits and their simplicity I use them all the time for having fun and for learning any kind of field, and I think I could not live without them.

Carolina Hernandez Villalobos (2010) “My Evolution in Electronic Literacy”. Aguascalientes: Arnest’s Edition ®

3 comentarios:

  1. Caro’s Essay 2

    No clear thesis statement / probably a comma after younger / I am going to KEEP using them / I am not sure if you need commas before BECAUSE.

    1- Pictures OF THEM IN magazines / I had to use them in secondary school?... The games? or the computer? / Maybe rephrase the sentence “another way of manipulating these tools was…”.

    2- Rephrase “since I got to the university I had to employ them” / which has given me/ not sure about EDUCATIVE knowledge maybe EDUCATIONAL? / has helped me / probably a comma after work on / Just make sure to give the space between paragraphs.

    3- A teacher / I don’t know if both expressions are correct “chance of creating” and chance to create” / Maybe the use of the word FINALLY here is not appropriate.

    4- Started by / manage = use? / let me = allows me? / a great way /

    IN GENERAL: the introduction paragraph seems to be just informative, you don’t state clearly what your essay points are going to be. I can say that you did a good job with coherence and minimal cohesion problems. You established your ideas precisely. Good job.

    Margarita

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  2. Hi Carolina!

    i don´t want to exaggerate as the first remark; we are not expert in writing and we try to do the best we can.

    My remarks are: when we use "because" is not necesary commas, i think that the remark above says all.

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  3. Hi, Caro. In general, your essay is well organized; however, you should state that electronic tools are not just important in your personal life but also in your professional one.

    Besides the comments made by your classmates, I have to say you need to correct the following mistakes:
    1. they allow ME INCREASE my knowledge in any field.
    2. I began using the computer just FOR PLAYING games from the internet
    3. Since I got TO the university
    4. and in the exchange program which HAVE GAVE me the opportunity to learn
    5. Not only ELECTRONIC TOOLS HAVE (have electronic tools) been useful in my education, but also in my personal life.
    6. the chance OF CREATING
    7. I would love to STUDY courses related WITH my B.A. AS
    8. FROM MY CHILDHOOD TO MY PRESENT AND UNTIL MY FUTURE (until now) electronic technologies have been and will be A GREAT WAYS to be educated and learn even more.
    9. I use them all the time FOR HAVING fun and FOR LEARNING any kind of field, and I think I could not live without them.

    Good job, anyway! Your essay is clear, concise and attractive.

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